I abs love this story and how it plays out, i await new updates in the future and i love your work, everything from the artstyle to the environments, music and everything is very well done. I love the work.
I do want more content of Jeaz and Cyrox tho plz plz 🙏🙏 (And caldex ofc ofc)
The actions scenes are always super well done, which is impressive, because other than horror, I personally find that action is the most difficult genre to write well, so I really must applaud the effort xou've put into making these scenes coherent and absolutely enjoyable 😌
Everything about IFS is top notch. Backgrounds, sprites, music, writing, pacing, world building, everything! 😁 I'm totally hooked and can't wait to see where xou guys take this compelling tale!
It doesn't happen often, but when there is such an amazing female character like Xaria despite all the characters being good. She is easily my favorite
This story has me so hooked right now and i love all the characters, I kinda hate how attracted I am to Brut... and Eryx must be protected at all costs (who im also severely attracted to)
Loving the vn so far, i like the setting and story building, and a very solid mix of characters. Also Eryx is too pure and I must protect him from harm!
I'm glad the story still continues, even though I'm late to the party. and even though calbex lashed out, if anything I just felt sad, rather than upset about the sudden whiplash. I just want to comfort him, but you can't comfort someone without knowing whats wrong first. so gonna be chilling and waiting for that to come along at some point. oh yea, Merry Christmas.
A pretty enjoyable YA fiction if that's your sort of thing. Art, worldbuilding, writing and character dynamic are all pretty well done.
My two biggest issues with this vn are:
1. Sex scene isn’t the best way to begin your story. It may lead your protagonist to be perceived as a horny nymphomaniac who’s main goal is getting laid, and while I know that’s the reason why a lot of people read fvn’s in the first place, it never the less can create a negative first impression, so that’s probably something you should not disclose about protagonist’s character for quite while.
2. I don’t like Calbex. As far as I understand knight’s duty aside from fighting is to be a good mentor to their squire yet Calbex has been neglecting both of these duties just because he is on recovery… apparently. Corwan works is ass off to become a knight yet Calbex simply doesn’t care about him or how well he becomes one, leaving his mentorhip to everyone else. He doesn't provide any mentorship, any guidance on what’s knight job is, doesn’t take any effort to encourage or discourage his passions… hell, he doesn’t provide much of an attention to hm really. I guess it’s for setting up his character arc but, like, doesn’t even higher ups demand of him to provide at least some sort of mentorship while he is recovering from injury? How is he still not in a retirement and out of the job? At this point I won’t mind if Corwan would be assigned even to Fen. Like sure, he is an ass, but at least he cares about rising good squires. Calbex, on the other hand just doesn’t.
To 1: Sex Scene can the the right way to begin a story. In some Sci-Fi Universe like Battletech and even Star Ship Trooper, Sex is a casual Thing between comrade. With the always looming thread on the horizon (plague) and focus on military and war - life is short and cheap. So the characters in this universe enjoy while they can.
To 2: When i look on the first day you are entirely correct. After the first dinner on day one between the two, the day basicly ends with just a deal. This can be easily fixed with some extra narration. However your asssements. However its a crucial mistake by both parties not just Calbex. On day two, Calbex provide moral support. After that he is cut off by the MCs tamper tantrum. Thats my only issus with the story: Dispite all the MCs dissapponitment by the bombshell Calbex dropped at him, you dont throw a fit at your Knight! And when Calbex called after him: "MC, wait!" the MC didnt listen. If Fen would have been the Knight, the MC would have been punished for disobyeing a direct order. The MC himself admits he acts like a child.
Fixing:
Day 1 evening can be easily /lazily fixed if Calbex just give the MC some Files or workout routine to learn. Can be done in just a few sentences...
Day2 + 3: The Outburst by both MC and Calbex seems to be a vital part of the story and their behaviour. A little bit more dialog my help, and not the "get angry and go to bed with bad mood - refuse to eloborate" - approach.
> With the always looming thread on the horizon (plague) and focus on military and war - life is short and cheap.
This explanation still doesn’t sit right with me. Unlike Battletech, IFS’s version of future doesn’t appear to be dystopian to resort to that sort of mentality, and while the plague is definitely a problem, it isn’t crashing moon from Majora’s Mask that is going to wipe everything out inevitably. It doesn’t help the fact that it was entirely MC’s choice to resort to military out of personal vendetta, so there is no real excuse for him to be a promiscuous slut.
And it isn’t like game adresses it as n tasteful way either. On the contrary it endorses such behavior which kinda insulting, honestly. According to it its okay to be a promiscuous slut, which is further reinforces harmful stereotypes for gay community. It either has to adress this sort of thing or left it offscreen entirely, cuz as it stands now, it just not a good look.
(On the other hand your second argument is on point and I fully agree with it)
And it isn’t like game adresses it as n tasteful way either. On the contrary it endorses such behavior which kinda insulting, honestly. According to it its okay to be a promiscuous slut, which is further reinforces harmful stereotypes for gay community. It either has to adress this sort of thing or left it offscreen entirely, cuz as it stands now, it just not a good look.
Would you kindly provide an example, pls.
For me the MC is just an 18-20 years old, who is barely out of puberty, who got surrounded by buff military furry guys, that fit exactly his liking. Of course he can barely keep his thoughts out of his gutter. Nothing to be ashemd of.
Great game, really love it, especially those characters, each of them is so cute!
God, had I found it when it's finished, I wouldn't have to bear the torment of waiting and expecting now
cant wait to see what will happen next, mostly what will happen between mc and Calbex, thats auch a cliffhanger, and how will mc interact with Alex and Brut :)
Loved Build 3 and excited for more! Heart wrenching ending, just the way I love it. No worries about delays or slowdowns, you've gotta do what works for yourself and your team and collaborators. Hope you have a good day :)
As a previous comment has mentioned, there seems to be an issue with the win version of the newest build (haven't tested the others). Upon watching the main files as the virus was quarantined, it seems the executable is being treated as a virus for some reason (and a trojan virus, at that O.o). Hopefully, this issue can get resolved soon (take your time though! :D)
Great update and love The story so far altough there were a couple glitches in this update a lot of characters gets duplicates like xaria Alex and cyrox but these glitches does in no way take away from how good this update was (btw this was from The Android version)
Aye this was the ongoing error mentioned in the dev log. We have a fix, but its going to take a long time to rewrite the code, so we are doing the full coding for Build 4. Thank you and thanks for enjoying it.
I love Cyrox so much, easily my favorite character so far he's really silly and cute. I really like the tiger girl too she's pretty cool and her blushing sprite is adorable. This update came by just in time for me, it really made my day just when I was feeling really depressed!
If the horniness gets in the way of serious scenes then I can see it not fitting. But if it’s in moments outside of those then it isn’t really bad. They are in war but they are just squires in training atm. Just depends on the execution and timing
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Here we go!!!!!!
I mean, Brut and Calbex is fine, minus Brut being a total ass at first.
The story is quite good, but I have to admit the emotional breakdowns are a bit over embedded.
Anyways, it's a good start and I definitely want to see more on the upcoming updates.
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I abs love this story and how it plays out, i await new updates in the future and i love your work, everything from the artstyle to the environments, music and everything is very well done. I love the work.
I do want more content of Jeaz and Cyrox tho plz plz 🙏🙏 (And caldex ofc ofc)
NOOOOOOO!! it can't just end like that!?! that's so meaaaan! what a dirty cliffhanger 😭😭
ugh this story is too good send help
The actions scenes are always super well done, which is impressive, because other than horror, I personally find that action is the most difficult genre to write well, so I really must applaud the effort xou've put into making these scenes coherent and absolutely enjoyable 😌
Everything about IFS is top notch. Backgrounds, sprites, music, writing, pacing, world building, everything! 😁 I'm totally hooked and can't wait to see where xou guys take this compelling tale!
It doesn't happen often, but when there is such an amazing female character like Xaria despite all the characters being good. She is easily my favorite
This story has me so hooked right now and i love all the characters, I kinda hate how attracted I am to Brut... and Eryx must be protected at all costs (who im also severely attracted to)
the art in this game is fire!
Loving the vn so far, i like the setting and story building, and a very solid mix of characters. Also Eryx is too pure and I must protect him from harm!
I'm glad the story still continues, even though I'm late to the party. and even though calbex lashed out, if anything I just felt sad, rather than upset about the sudden whiplash. I just want to comfort him, but you can't comfort someone without knowing whats wrong first. so gonna be chilling and waiting for that to come along at some point. oh yea, Merry Christmas.
A pretty enjoyable YA fiction if that's your sort of thing. Art, worldbuilding, writing and character dynamic are all pretty well done.
My two biggest issues with this vn are:
1. Sex scene isn’t the best way to begin your story. It may lead your protagonist to be perceived as a horny nymphomaniac who’s main goal is getting laid, and while I know that’s the reason why a lot of people read fvn’s in the first place, it never the less can create a negative first impression, so that’s probably something you should not disclose about protagonist’s character for quite while.
2. I don’t like Calbex. As far as I understand knight’s duty aside from fighting is to be a good mentor to their squire yet Calbex has been neglecting both of these duties just because he is on recovery… apparently. Corwan works is ass off to become a knight yet Calbex simply doesn’t care about him or how well he becomes one, leaving his mentorhip to everyone else. He doesn't provide any mentorship, any guidance on what’s knight job is, doesn’t take any effort to encourage or discourage his passions… hell, he doesn’t provide much of an attention to hm really. I guess it’s for setting up his character arc but, like, doesn’t even higher ups demand of him to provide at least some sort of mentorship while he is recovering from injury? How is he still not in a retirement and out of the job? At this point I won’t mind if Corwan would be assigned even to Fen. Like sure, he is an ass, but at least he cares about rising good squires. Calbex, on the other hand just doesn’t.
To 1: Sex Scene can the the right way to begin a story. In some Sci-Fi Universe like Battletech and even Star Ship Trooper, Sex is a casual Thing between comrade. With the always looming thread on the horizon (plague) and focus on military and war - life is short and cheap. So the characters in this universe enjoy while they can.
To 2: When i look on the first day you are entirely correct. After the first dinner on day one between the two, the day basicly ends with just a deal. This can be easily fixed with some extra narration. However your asssements. However its a crucial mistake by both parties not just Calbex. On day two, Calbex provide moral support. After that he is cut off by the MCs tamper tantrum. Thats my only issus with the story: Dispite all the MCs dissapponitment by the bombshell Calbex dropped at him, you dont throw a fit at your Knight! And when Calbex called after him: "MC, wait!" the MC didnt listen. If Fen would have been the Knight, the MC would have been punished for disobyeing a direct order. The MC himself admits he acts like a child.
Fixing:
Day 1 evening can be easily /lazily fixed if Calbex just give the MC some Files or workout routine to learn. Can be done in just a few sentences...
Day2 + 3: The Outburst by both MC and Calbex seems to be a vital part of the story and their behaviour. A little bit more dialog my help, and not the "get angry and go to bed with bad mood - refuse to eloborate" - approach.
> With the always looming thread on the horizon (plague) and focus on military and war - life is short and cheap.
This explanation still doesn’t sit right with me. Unlike Battletech, IFS’s version of future doesn’t appear to be dystopian to resort to that sort of mentality, and while the plague is definitely a problem, it isn’t crashing moon from Majora’s Mask that is going to wipe everything out inevitably. It doesn’t help the fact that it was entirely MC’s choice to resort to military out of personal vendetta, so there is no real excuse for him to be a promiscuous slut.
And it isn’t like game adresses it as n tasteful way either. On the contrary it endorses such behavior which kinda insulting, honestly. According to it its okay to be a promiscuous slut, which is further reinforces harmful stereotypes for gay community. It either has to adress this sort of thing or left it offscreen entirely, cuz as it stands now, it just not a good look.
(On the other hand your second argument is on point and I fully agree with it)
Would you kindly provide an example, pls.
For me the MC is just an 18-20 years old, who is barely out of puberty, who got surrounded by buff military furry guys, that fit exactly his liking. Of course he can barely keep his thoughts out of his gutter. Nothing to be ashemd of.
You clearly weren't much around the military
My dad was, and as much as he liked to talk about it not once he was mentioning the fact he and his boys fucked with each other in an orgy sessions.
And even if they were it doesn’t mean that a fictional story should present it as tasteless as it does.
Great game, really love it, especially those characters, each of them is so cute!
God, had I found it when it's finished, I wouldn't have to bear the torment of waiting and expecting now
cant wait to see what will happen next, mostly what will happen between mc and Calbex, thats auch a cliffhanger, and how will mc interact with Alex and Brut :)
Loved Build 3 and excited for more! Heart wrenching ending, just the way I love it. No worries about delays or slowdowns, you've gotta do what works for yourself and your team and collaborators. Hope you have a good day :)
Sorry to be a bother but could you please add platform tags to the downloads, without them people cannot download the update in the Itch.io app
done. My bad when I uploaded the hot fix I forgot to do that.
Thank you very much!
We playing as a boy?
Protag is a human male, yes.
Thanks
I had the quarantine issue in windows too, so I loaded the PC version in windows sandbox and had no issue from reading the update in the virtual box
As a previous comment has mentioned, there seems to be an issue with the win version of the newest build (haven't tested the others). Upon watching the main files as the virus was quarantined, it seems the executable is being treated as a virus for some reason (and a trojan virus, at that O.o). Hopefully, this issue can get resolved soon (take your time though! :D)
Great update and love The story so far altough there were a couple glitches in this update a lot of characters gets duplicates like xaria Alex and cyrox but these glitches does in no way take away from how good this update was (btw this was from The Android version)
Aye this was the ongoing error mentioned in the dev log. We have a fix, but its going to take a long time to rewrite the code, so we are doing the full coding for Build 4. Thank you and thanks for enjoying it.
The game won't launch after I downloaded the Win ver. It gives me like an error message "Can not execute" it says.
I'm having the same issue. My computer REFUSES to open it, wont even give me the option cause it says it detects a virus in the download
I love Cyrox so much, easily my favorite character so far he's really silly and cute. I really like the tiger girl too she's pretty cool and her blushing sprite is adorable. This update came by just in time for me, it really made my day just when I was feeling really depressed!
The vn is okay but a horny MC in a time of war against the Plague is not really fitting.
If the horniness gets in the way of serious scenes then I can see it not fitting. But if it’s in moments outside of those then it isn’t really bad. They are in war but they are just squires in training atm. Just depends on the execution and timing